November 2023

In this round of revision, we’ve reached the Hate Mail scene, in which people who don’t deserve to die do. I have repeatedly interrogated the necessity of this scene because I know it’s difficult. Intentionally! Can’t trauma-bond without trauma, and this is the trauma the situation provided. It works structurally. I’ve barely altered it since

It’s crunch season at my soulless corporate writing gig, so personal revision is proceeding at a creep. Since the last update, the revision has reached the point at which I’d left myself a note that Heroine didn’t have to participate so much in Hero spilling his guts. He wants to tell her. He’s not lying.